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Where would the following sentence best be placed?


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Yeah All right T s I writing editor people Here

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we go Question number two in context Where would the

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following sentence best be placed All right so this one

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you've got to have skimmed the whole freak of the

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whole awesome letter here Let's go back and do this

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real quickly I mean from previously you said it was

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all this issue Quickly Overstate your worry Animal shelter mentoring

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the maintain good irritated business We're coming from pet owner

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All right so there she laid out her peev ignition

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that compared rafters I stated my email visiting north shortly

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and job My husband I went there and had dominated

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Hunter Hunter wasn't going good health for a reduction on

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me home We adopt him a one hundred million of

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it And kennel cough when we got home and coming

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to finally Okay ugly on paragraph two Sad for the

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dog Yeah I should really quit smoking All right paragraph

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three I called North Shore and Linda stands very upsetting

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him in there playing dogs illumination and overturned downstream bank

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statements till just two hundred fifty dollars missing value family

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resulting in any way Okay So clearly upset dog owner

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Well kind of camp lamer so my request was politely

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refused That's the sentence that has to get inserted somewhere

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And this whole thing is we'll just kind of sad

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like a human suffer That's one thing but well if

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your dog suffers so that's really bad So all right

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well who refused this big request that she had made

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more thinking We think it was the adoption counsellor at

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the Animal League with a kind of a polite refusal

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government bureaucratic vibe where he just didn't want to give

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her her money back This set of clues has toe

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logically occur after the writer's request for a refund but

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before she checks her not altered bank account well it

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really can't occur after sentence Three Because the author is

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trying to state the reasons that well it would be

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mutually beneficial to grant this request It also shouldn't be

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placed after Sentence six Because the writers request was to

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take the dog home not asking just for a refund

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yet unless she sends the corpus of guy stuff Hunters

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from and the phone call to the North Shore Animal

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League was not a request Like see what have you

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put it in there so it doesn't get a sentence

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about refusal after it So what's gotta be Be after

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sentence thirteen like way at the end here I assume

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that by explaining my dog's illness she would effectively overturn

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my adoption fee and then you would just stick in

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My request will play for you yet for that kind

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of clothes Pretty clean All right well here's to hoping 00:02:36.598 --> [endTime] the dog gets better quickly True

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