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ACT English 2.11 Passage Drill
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ACT English: Passage Drill 2, Problem 11. Which of the following sentences would make the most effective transition?

ACT English 2.15 Passage Drill
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In this ACT English passage drill determine if the writer of the passage may or may not have achieved their proposed goal.

ACT English 3.2 Passage Drill
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ACT English: Passage Drill Drill 3, Problem 2. What would the paragraph lose if the writer omits the underlined phrase?

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ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 2. Which choice expresses the underlined portion most concisely?

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Here's your Shmoop du jour, brought to you by makeup. Try the lipstick, but don't

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be a dipstick.

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How would you correct the underlined portion below, if at all?

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Sally bought makeup she didn't need because the sales associate promised her a free gift

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with purchase.

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In the original sentence, we've got the term "free gift." We hear this

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term all the time.

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However, "free gift" is redundant because all gifts are free by definition.

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The point is that we can get rid of choice (A) because of this redundancy.

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Like (A), choice (B) is guilty of redundancy. The term "added bonus" is redundant because

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a bonus is, by definition, something that's added to something else.

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Which brings us to choices (C) and (D).

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Though they relate the same basic information, (C) does so more concisely.

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There's no need to say "a gift that came with purchase" when we can say "a gift

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with purchase" to communicate the same idea with fewer words.

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Remember, less is best.

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