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PSAT 1.14 Writing Narrative Walkthrough. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?

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Thank you We sneak then here's your shmoop du jour

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brought to you by musicians You might want to make

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yourself scarce way here There's a member of the orchestra

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who has a trombone to pick with you Alright Checking

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the pasig national endowment for the arts history and that's

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when you know nation i'm picking out key words here

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and oh david brinkley okay how would you change the

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underlined portion if at all Herman david kenin the president

00:33

of the american federation of musicians who stepped in following

00:36

david smith's death in may nineteen sixty five and here

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a potential answers starting with no change thing All right

00:45

Well we're thinking we're thinking and we're not going to

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think any more shmoop do it for us four new

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members being added to the national council on the arts

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this is almost as exciting as the time we inducted

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three new teddy bears into our weekly tea party club

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although on a sad note it's just never been the

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same since benny bear moved on tio greener pastures okay

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enough depressing stuff Let's switch gears is something invigorating and

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thrilling an uplifting and like this question the passage tells

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us that there are four newbies being added to the

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council and none of them have giant fours on their

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chests so we're assuming the human torch did not get

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an invite Our answer choices are exact replicas of each

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other minus a few minor punctuation changes but maybe the

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differences aren't really all that minor The senses written plunks

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a semi colon down after herman david kenin but that

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implies that the person being described directly afterward the president

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of the american federation of musicians is a different fella

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and if we assume that's the case and then count

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up the number of people we get five that's one

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too many so unless these guys were playing a game

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of musical chairs and one of them was too slow

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on the draw when the deejay cut the tune this

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can't be right More likely this clause is describing cannon

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meaning we need a comma here not a semi colon

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which is going to take out option d moving on

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option c uses a comma after kenan but then plops

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down a semi colon after musicians which is just weird

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The claws that follows this word starts who stepped in

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Blah blah blah blah So the description of kenan is

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clearly still ongoing since we're not yet introducing the next

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guy on the list A semi colon won't work here

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either So c is out which just leaves b Yeah

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there should be a comma in both places One to

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indicate that kenan is the president of the american federation

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of musicians and another to show that he stepped in

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following david smith's death And with that his bio is 00:02:39.578 --> [endTime] over hope His obituary read a little better Home

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