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What do annual potato yields have to do with reducing water usage at power plants? We know you want to know. Watch this SAT Writing video to learn more.
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Okay shmoop er's Four of eleven coming at us writing
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And here we go And we're still kind of focused
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on all this science stuff Okay so let's look at
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this phrase approximately the annual us potato yield each year
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Right We're finding the dock here This result okay We
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think this was going to thousands of people in our
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peace resulting from for example a lot of people around
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one three seven point four million tons of approximately the
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annual us potato field each year Okay well here we
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go What we think and we need to change anything
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here Yeah proctor yeah Probably should cause approximately the and
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you will Us potato yield just sounds awkward doesn't infringe
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the word's kind of flip around there So generally if
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you khun say a straightforward fact with fewer words say
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the straight for in fact with fewer words Yeah i
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bet you wish we learned that better hear from up
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when we ran along here we only need to convey
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annual once right self approximately the annual us potato yield
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each year that really hits it off Who knows that
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annual thing there Yeah the word annual means each year
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in fact and saying a word to ways doesn't add
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any clarity or nuance and sentence So yeah we're going
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to change a yearly annually also mean each year give
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it a beansie but neither of these options solves the
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issue of redundancy Repeating things saying the same thing over
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and over and over and over again and again Sorry
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