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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

The vernal equinox, which occurs in March


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Okay sy shmoop there's Another sentence for you to analyze

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to death The vernal equinox is the spring date on

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which the sun crosses the celestial equator and it occurs

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In march We got problems here The vernal equinox which

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occurs in march Comma dot dot dot one of the

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next words crystal ball time More thinking here Well this

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revised sentence starts with the subject The vernal equinox right

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that's A subject takes a break for a little aside

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which occupies in march and then basically leaves us hanging

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Oh so route we'll need to go straight for the

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verb in order to complete sense and is the spring

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date is the only choice that allows us to do

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that So the answer here is b it kind of

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goes like the vernal equinox which occurs in march is

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the spring date yet i get it Okay so relative

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clause is generally contained extra information that can be removed

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without affecting the sentence Try removing the relative clause here

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which occurs in march entirely It makes coordinating conjunctions like

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a sound silly and what also doesn't work is having

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over but all is indeed right so that's it answers 00:01:13.192 --> [endTime] bay were smoked and we're equal next

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