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PSAT 1.14 Writing Diagnostic 185 Views
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PSAT 1.14 Writing Diagnostic. Should the writer make the addition here?
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Thank you We sneak and here's your smoke too Sure
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brought to you by prison sentences considering where the inmates
- 00:09
spend all their time there Basically compound senses are checking
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this passage Sorry Damming ons Yeah we've read this really
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sad What happened This pork out all right We're skimming
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skimming on scamming And we're done at this point the
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writer's considering adding the following phrase between money and to
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her sotomayor's instructions Should the writer make the addition here
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I don't hear the potential answers Why wait edition When
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did this become a math problem If they start asking
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us to put all this stuff in or three by
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three matrix we're gonna lose it all right We can
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rest easy No need for us to pull our calculators
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out of hiding this questions simply saying that the author
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of the passage has a few words surrounded by m
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dash is that they think might go nicely here But
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will they Well let's read a little more of this
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part of passage so we could get our bearing There
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was just one problem The nun had little money of
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her own and couldn't afford all the advance fees so
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she borrowed money from family and friends in puerto rico
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and pennsylvania and then wire the money to various locations
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in the atlantic city area Okay so we're talking about
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sticking the new content right here between money and two
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does that make sense Does it add anything to the
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existing content Are we in danger of running out of
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print a rink if we keep making this thing longer
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All good questions be suggests that yes it's a good
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idea because it introduces a new idea that will become
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relevant in the next paragraph on ly if you're reading
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this passage backwards we were told right off the bat
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that this soda mayer was a shady guy to the
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max adding this new verbiage doesn't tell us anything we
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don't already know so b can't be right the sea
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have it right don't says no the writers shouldn't added
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because it contradicts the main idea of the sentence Well
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that's not true either We already know that nun didn't
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just wake up this morning and on a whim start
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hounding friends and family for funds everything she's doing she's
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doing because so tamar has asked her to so no
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Contradiction here What about d No because it interrupts the
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sentence with irrelevant information Isn't your relevant though well it's
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actually important to the story that so tomorrow is behind
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it all Otherwise you've just got a renegade nun who
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might need to take off three or four weeks to
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work on our mental health So no the suggested words
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aren't your relevant as it turns out it's a totally
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excellent idea to add them Nice work writer Whoever you
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are as option a says it introduces information that is
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relevant to the sense although we might be able to
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guess that sotomayor instructed her specifically to wire money to
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some places in atlantic city adding language to make that
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idea perfectly clear can't be a bad thing Let's just
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thank our lucky stars We don't have to count up
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all the places she wired money to We're already turned
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off the mast side of our brain for the day
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